Fight or Flight

hey! also ich fand's toll! :) hmm ich lese gerne ab und zu zoxro ffs, dann gucke ich einfach nach solchen, deswegen also erst jetzt der kommi! ^^

ich fand es cool, dass du's auf englsich geschrieben hast, so wie einige andere habe auch ich ein paar fehler gefunden, fand es aber eig. ganz gut. glaub mir: selbst in den usa sind viele nicht in der lage so gut/richtig zu schreiben! ^^ obwohl es mir, wegen dem satzbau den du manchmal verwendet hast, manchmal vorkam als würde es altes englsich sein, eig. voll poetisch! :P

jedenfalls fand ich auch die story an sich richtig niedlich und ehrlichgesagt auch recht realistisch, also die andeutung zoxro. :)

hach, naja hat mich sehr gefreut es zu lesen! ;)

mach's gut!

pp

Heeeeeeeey das ist echt Geil geworden
ich Freu mich auf mehr

Lg ZoRobin

A good OS, nice Stil to read .

Ah - I've got to correct myself here (again): I didn't realize, the whole title of the fandom is "Witchhunter Robin", so I thought I'd be a crossover with Nico Robin from One Piece (which indeed would have fit due to her witchcraft-alike powers). Sorry for that :D

The bird of the hermes is my name, eating my wings to make me tame.

Long time no see. And how splendid to see/read you returning with that certain fandom *smirks* And in my humble opinion it's not too much OOC. (Even though I can't really imagine a sick Integra - whatever.) I liked how you designed the ending of the story, with that last sentence. Hehe, well, I certainly could imagine this... amusement. And of course a wise (probably proofed through self-experiments) commendation - for me, best to do against a headache is drinking coke (which indeed has similar ingredients as aspirine. Strange world.). Okay, I'm blathering.

Mistakes (to keep... I'm sorry. Teacher's genes. Oh well.)
* One again -> missing c
* It takes -> wrong tense
* The sun had set before hours -> Clumsy. I'd say "had set hours ago" or something.
* Or was there another reason, why she felt so terrible hot? -> You dedicated your chapters to those without knowledge of English interpunctuation. So I don't have, but the comma irritates me. (Well, I can't even handle German commata rules, so, nevermind.)
* Who else would appear, when she just take a break? -> was just taking, I suppose.

Ah right. But it's always a pleasure reading your english OS. Looking forward to the next one, sincerly, genek.

Kurz, knapp Gut
obwohl ich mir mehr vom ende erhofft hatte ;)
ich find die One-Shots echt gelungen (wär nur schöner, wären sie auf deutsch^^)

Wieso sind alle Commis auf englisch?^^
Nunja kein wunder der Text ist auf englisch hehe y.y
ich find die geschichte toll auch wenn ich englisch nicht leiden kann XDD
erwarte weiter, großes von dir ;)

Hey, I think your english is not that bad.
But how do you write your story? It sometimes sounds like you translated your story directly from German to English. The story is very good anyways, but I think there are some grammar mistakes and also some syntax errors.
What about an english Betareader?

I'll give you some examples:
"Triumph and downfall lie near together.">> In english you would rather say: “ Triumph and downfall are crossing a thin line”

„You have not wanted it differently.">> “You didn’t want it the other way.”

“And you have not earned it differently...">> "And you also deserved it that way.”

Well just a few examples, I hope there's no mistake; as I am not perfect either.

But I hope it helped a little bit...

Hey, I think your english is not that bad.
But how do you write your story? It sometimes sounds like you translated your story directly from German to English. The story is very good anyways, but I think there are some grammar mistakes and also some syntax errors.
What about an english Betareader?

I'll give you some examples:
"Triumph and downfall lie near together.">> In english you would rather say: “ Triumph and downfall are crossing a thin line”

„You have not wanted it differently.">> “You didn’t want it the other way.”

“And you have not earned it differently...">> "And you also deserved it that way.”

Well just a few examples, I hope there's no mistake; as I am not perfect either.

But I hope it helped a little bit...

Hey! I'm glad to see you're back again. Unfortunately I don't know the Crossover-partner, but anyway I liked the thoughtful atmosphere in this one. But however I'm always finding things (which doesn't mean they're certainly wrong - I didn't study English :D):

Maybe someday she have to be stopped. -> you missed out the would "Maybe someday she would have to be stopped."

Amon didn't know a case of a craft-user, that didn't end as a drama. -> I'm not sure about this one, but I think it has to be past perfect here (and without comma) "Amon dindn't know a case of a craft-user that hadn't ended as a drama."

He always tried to see a danger in her. But now he couldn't stop thinking that she must be protected. -> "that she had to be protected" as you have to use an auxilliary verb here.

Hoping the fourth one won't take that long time (but hey, you can't rush perfection, righ?) ^^
genek