Hangover

Thanks so much for your HUGE comment. Aber du hättest auch in deutsch scheiben können x'D
Also ich weiss das Yamapi nicht so gerne Yamapi von seinen engen freunden genannt werden will, deshalb Yamashita und nicht Tomohisa :D

Danke für die tips und bitte les auch "Uncrowned King" Wenn du zeit hast ^^

*gggg* big smile*

Hi there,
I REALLY don't know why, but I ACTUALLY LIKED that one-shot! :D It was so funny, and I love the dynamik of the dialogs!

I found your ID when I was looking up the fanfiction list of Yamapi and was happy to found rare FFs there! Thanks for posting some! ^^

But some words to your awesome Ff here, I hope, my english knowlegde is enough to express what I want to say... ^^°°

First, your english is great! :D I love reading english very much and the weird thing is, even small things can be so much better when expressed in english.
So that's why I really like the dialogs.

I would advise to make more breaks between the dialogs, it would be easier to read. ^^

The titel is also funny, that's why I got curious of this FF. But I would also advise to change the "ohne Titel" into "Hangover" cause it would stay interesting, if the actual titel is also mentioned in the chapter.

I liked very much the special expressions like "Arashi's diva" - *hahaha* couldn't stop laughing. :D

I was wondering, why you changed the way of calling Yamapi so often. Once it's Yamapi, in the middle it's Yamashita, and then again it's Yamapi.
And it's strange, that Toma calls him Yamashita, by his last name but not by his forename. I thought, they were childhoodfriends, as you mentioned? So the distant of the way they adress each other is a bit strange. ^^

Yamapi's behaviour when being drunk is very cute, and also Toma acting so caring - cute. :D

To summon up, the storyline was really cute, I enjoyed reading it very much! :D

Greetings!